In many countries schools have several problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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kind of acting from pupils. regardless some minority of students who have spiritual problems and they Should See
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who cause difficulties in schools are coming from families who
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convert them to evil. We all should be more careful
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