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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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People
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 from different age groups have been showing an inclination toward using social networking sites while
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 kind of communication causes many dangers. While using social
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 can cause in being exposed to inappropriate content, it can be useful if used carefully. The advantage of
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 issue is that since the invention of social
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, many
people
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 have been better able to connect with each other and
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 to keep up to date with the lives of their friends, families, co-workers and even celebrities,
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 a degree which was previously impossible.
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,
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 will be given the chance to post things on social
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 and find better job opportunities or even like-minded
people
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 online.
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, I once contacted a girl on
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 who turned out to be an instructor
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 I am and we have been in touch ever since. To talk about its advantage, it can be said that as
people
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 of all ages have access to social
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,
children
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 can be exposed to adult content, and are themselves vulnerable to
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 approached by strangers with unknown intentions. Even if
children
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 are sure of
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 they're talking to on social
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, social
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 issues are not completely eliminated.
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Cyberbullying
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Cyber bullying
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Cyberbullying
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 is frequently reported in the news
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 and occurs on social
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 between
children
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 and schoolchildren.
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, I believe that if it is used under the supervision of parents, it would be less likely to cause problems for
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 and it can be very much efficient for them,
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. In conclusion, as long as
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 are aware of the risks of using social
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, and are careful to post only respectful and respectable content,
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 the advantages of social
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 far outweigh the disadvantages, and
children
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 and adults alike should be allowed to benefit from
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 technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social media platforms
  • Connectivity
  • Self-expression
  • Creativity
  • Global communication
  • Instantaneous communication
  • Personal growth
  • Career advancement
  • Privacy concerns
  • Identity theft
  • Cyberbullying
  • Addiction
  • Productivity
  • Misinformation
  • Crisis
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