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some people beleive that is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of moeny. others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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Many people announce
that is
 good to deal with issues like job
unsatisfaction
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 and lack of money. Other people and I believe that it is more valuable to try and develop hard circumstances and
also
 remedy situations like what I said before. In
this
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 I will argue both points of view and share my ideas.
First
 and foremost, job unsatisfaction could lead to serious mental health problems and issues
such
 as depression and anxiety. If you do not like your profession or your workplace, You will leave it as soon as possible and you would become poor and redundant. Shortage and lack of money are vital problems nowadays. Because the high cost of accommodations and
also
 basic necessities of life are very expensive in
this
 modern age. ,
Also
 you can not make living with low wages. it
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 to me the highest figure belonged to me
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