As well as making money, businesses have social reponsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?
One of the main
thing
in Fix the agreement mistake
things
business
instead
of making money
it
is social Correct pronoun usage
apply
responsibility
. Does it true or not ? Personally, I agree with this
statement.
Initially
of course making Add a comma
,Initially
money
it is the main feature of the
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apply
any
Correct your spelling
many
businesses
and Fix the agreement mistake
business
companies
. Fix the agreement mistake
company
Firstly
, because
if Correct word choice
apply
business
would not make Add an article
the business
a business
money
business
could not survive. Secondly
, in many cases business
is built to make money
, I thinks
it is the main interest of the founder or owner. Change the verb form
think
However
, instead
of making money
business
should have Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
social
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a social
goal
because without Fix the agreement mistake
goals
this
goal business
would not be successful . I mean that it should be useful for society Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
Correct your spelling
for
fore
example if Correct your spelling
for
business
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a business
produce
something Correct subject-verb agreement
produces
what
is not useful for society and it is not popular among Change the word
that
people
and people
do not need it how business
will Add an article
the business
a business
be exist
? So that means that Change the verb form
exist
product
Correct article usage
the product
wich
is Correct your spelling
which
business
produce
should be useful and society Replace the word
products
need
Change the verb form
needs
this
product. Secondly
to became
a really successful and popular Wrong verb form
become
company
for instance
like
Apple or Coca Cola etc. your Change preposition
apply
company
/business
have
to have Correct subject-verb agreement
has
it
own principles and ideas which Change the pronoun
its
are
your Unnecessary verb
apply
business
want
to show Correct subject-verb agreement
wants
the
whole world. Change preposition
to the
Fore
example you understand that Correct your spelling
For
everyday
many Replace the word
every day
people
pass out because of the
Correct article usage
apply
lungs'
cancer which is Change noun form
lungs
Correct your spelling
cause
couse
Correct your spelling
caused
of
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by
the
smoking cigarettes and your Correct article usage
apply
company
produce
products or Correct subject-verb agreement
produces
promote
some advertisement thanks to Correct subject-verb agreement
promotes
Correct your spelling
which
wich
Correct your spelling
which
people
can decrease Correct your spelling
their
theire
consumption of Correct your spelling
their
Correct your spelling
cigarettes
cigarets
. Correct your spelling
cigarettes
That is
what I personally reckon is social responsibility
.
However
, if you have your
small Change the word
a
start
Add a hyphen
start-up
up
Change preposition
apply
for example
bakery near your house and you have not got a big client base , I think it is not necessary to have social responsibility
.
In conclusion, if you want make
a giant Add the particle
to make
company
and become first
in the market you must have social responsibility
. But if you Add a missing verb
are in
in
the beginning of building your Change the preposition
at
company
and you have your own small start
Add a hyphen
start-up
up
it is not obligatory Change preposition
apply
have
Add the particle
to have
social
Add an article
a social
responsibility
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