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Nowadays many people choose ready-made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a choice?

Nowadays, we are living in a modern society where
people
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 find everything efficiently around their
habitant
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. Fast
food
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 and ready-made
food
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 delivery are kinds of convenience that make
people
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 refuse to cook at home. There are both side effects of
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 a choice.
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 with, stand with proponents who favour ordering fast
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 and ready-made
food
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, we agree that it can
be saved
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 a lot of
time
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 for
people
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on
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going shopping, taking
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 to choose what kind of
food
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you
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they
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 want to cook and
time
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 for cooking. It can consume you,
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, for two to three hours .
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 of that, you only need to spend
time
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 surfing the mobile screen and clicking on the dishes that you want to eat. During the
time
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 waiting for
food
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, you can spend
time
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 with your family members,
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friends or do some favourite things or even have
time
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 to focus more on your work. For those who are workaholics,
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 is really the best idea
to
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 them.
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,
on the other hand
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, the opponents have their disagreement on
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 way of providing
intake
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food
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 quality every day because they will be pondering a lot whether the ready-made
food
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 can be processed in a proper way and whether all of them are fresh enough .
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, most of them will definitely choose to go to the market and cook
food
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 themselves for their family and friends.
This
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 reason is truly convincing. In conclusion, ready-made
food
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 is actually meant a lot in certain necessary situations and not always the best choice for
people
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 to
lay
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rely on it for
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 their
family
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family's
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 health
on
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apply
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it
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.

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structure
Group ideas in each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
language
Use simple but correct grammar and cautious wording to avoid errors.
task
State your view clearly in the introduction and keep this stance through the essay leading to a conclusion.
content
Add one or two clear examples to back up points and show links to real life.
content
Some good effort to cover both sides.
structure
There is a clear ending that restates the idea.
idea
The idea of time saving is used well.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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