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the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The chart illustrates the outcomes of
an
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observation of
people
 who have habits of buying and consuming
coffee
 and tea during
last
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 four weeks in five Australian cities. Overall, Melbourne and Hobart had the highest volume of individuals who went to café for tea and
coffee
.
Peoples
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 who are from Adelaide and Brisbane had maintained the lowest percentage of buying fresh
coffee
 in
last
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 4 weeks. More than 50% of individuals from Brisbane and Hobart had the highest ratio of buying instant
coffee
, whereas, Sydney had the lowest proportion of
people
 who bought instant
coffee
 over
at
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45%.
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,
peoples
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 from Melbourne and Adelaide
had
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continued
its
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 percentage at 47% and 50% respectively. Melbourne, Hobart and Sydney had the highest volume of
people
 who went to café for tea or
coffee
 and the percentages for these three are over 60% and below 65%.Sydney individuals had the highest proportion of buying fresh
coffee
 at around 45%,
where
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 Brisbane and Adelaide had the lowest volume of
people
 who bought
coffee
 that
were
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 fresh at below 35% for both.
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