The growth of online shopping will one day to all shops in town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?
The number of online shopping is increasing dramatically, so according to some, it would cause to close
regular
Change preposition
of regular
stores
in towns or cities. In my opinion, I totally disagree because there are some reasons that traditional Use synonyms
stores
retain their business.
The social aspect of regular Use synonyms
stores
is a good reason that the rise of e-shopping could not replace regular Use synonyms
stores
. There is Use synonyms
face-to-face
interaction between consumers and retailers. Add an article
a face-to-face
In other words
, knowledgeable and helpful sale staffs give information about products while consumers see the feature and Linking Words
color
as well Fix the agreement mistake
colors
finger
them. That’s whyCorrect word choice
as finger
,
shopping is a pleasure which some people consider as Remove the comma
apply
an
entertainment in their leisure time. Remove the article
apply
For instance
, they spent time with friends in a clothing store to finger the material and try a cloth if Linking Words
Add an article
the color
color
fits with skin tone while sellers are speaking about the designer or the quality of Change the spelling
colour
textile
.
E_ shopping has some issues that’s why it does not replace regular Add an article
the textile
stores
. These issues are people mistakes, shipping and fraud which are big concerns for customers. It means an online retailer steers the money and pieces of data, especially the information Use synonyms
of
the credit card. Change preposition
on
In addition
, customers make mistakes about the quality of the product or size Linking Words
especially
in Add the comma(s)
,especially
case
of Correct article usage
the case
cloths
. Correct your spelling
clothes
Moreover
, shipping is another issue for online shopping because it is sometimes as expensive as the item you order or if retailers send a product with Linking Words
a
poor quality Correct article usage
apply
of
shipping, you will receive a damaged or broken product.
In conclusion, Change preposition
apply
although
some people think Linking Words
fast growing
online shopping will be a leading cause of closing Add a hyphen
fast-growing
stores
in Use synonyms
the
cities and Correct article usage
apply
town
, I totally disagree. Traditional Fix the agreement mistake
towns
stores
retain their business because Use synonyms
security
and social aspect of in-store purchases Change preposition
of security
that
are two important Correct pronoun usage
which
advantage
of traditional Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
stores
.Use synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite