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The maps illustrate the changes that took place in the town of Langley from 1910 to 1950. 

According to the
first
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 diagram in 1910, on the left
side
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 of the
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 was Jordon
street
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, along which were a wide number of townhouses on both sides.
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, the right
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 of the
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 was separated from various houses by
Sherman
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street
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, where a store and a laundry were on one
side
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, and a cafe was on the other
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. The upper region of the
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 was a factory and wasteland.
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, the lower
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 was a wasteland and railway workers’ cottages.

 Turning to the
second
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map
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 in 1950, Jordon
street
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 and
Sherman
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street
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 remained unchanged;
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, townhouses were turned into three flats on the left
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 of Jordon
street
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.
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, the factory was replaced by
Sherman
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 mansions, and
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 park with a children’s play area in the bottom right corner took the place of wasteland. It is worth noting that a new lane was constructed and the number of stores increased in size, whereas the railway line was lost. 
Overall, it is evident that
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 area became larger with more facilities and tall buildings over the 40 years.
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