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The diagram illustrates the stages of making a storehouse facility using concrete canvas
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. Overall, the process involves eight stages. It begins with manufacturing the
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 and ends with storing the
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 in the stockpile area.
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, the process starts with producing and packaging the dry concrete
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 with
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the fibrous
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 top surface, and a waterproof layer.
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, these
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 are
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 delivered and unwrapped after reaching the appropriate destination. In stage four, there are lots of processes that go on in making the storehouse area.
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, pegs are made and held firmly on the ground and a cloth-like material, which is 10 metres wide is spread on the ground with the help of a tractor as the pulley. Following
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, the air is pumped into
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 material in order to make it spacious and firmly held into the ground. A door is
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 created to allow access to
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 reservoir. At stage six, the fibrous surface is
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 watered to make it even stronger. It is
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 left for about 20-24 hours to set and made ready for use.
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, within 24 hours, the storage area is ready for storing goods.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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