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Not enough students choose science subjects in universities in many countries. What are the reasons and what are the effects to the society?

#students #science #subjects #universities #countries #effects #society
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In many higher education institutes
at
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 different nations,
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 for
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science based
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subjects
 is getting decreased. The main reason for
this
 is the difficulty to obtain a recognized distinction in
this
 stream.
As a result
, many
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science based
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 companies will face the challenge of not having
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 number of employees with
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 qualifications to fulfil different jobs.
Science
 is a complicated field compared to non-
science
subjects
. For a student to excel in
this
 field, he should have logical
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reasoning
resoning
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reasoning
 ability, advanced thinking skills and superior understanding powers. As most of the children are average students who like to enjoy their life, in order to get good grades,
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they have
theyhave
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they have
 to work extremely hard.
Therefore
, young learners prefer to opt for easier
subjects
 to secure good results.
For example
, a survey conducted by a Singapore university using
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 students showed that 65% of the sample prefer to continue their higher studies in
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management
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managment
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management
 field as they find those comparatively easier. As
such
, if
this
 trend continues, it would badly affect
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science related
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 companies as they would suffer from
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 of sufficient competent employees in future. It is difficult to train people for a certain task
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 if they do not have
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sufficient background knowledge. Lack of people with advanced knowledge of emerging sciences will cause a void in the companies and there would be too many candidates for .non-
science
 related jobs creating an employment imbalance in the society. In conclusion,
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 generation's
seemingly
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 selection of non-
science
subjects
 has become an issue that must be addressed
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immediately
immediatly
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.
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 reason is the difficulty of the subject matter which makes students
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have bad grades. So, if
this
 persists, it would create a huge demand for
science
 graduates and other graduates may find it difficult to find a good job even if they have a
First
 class degree.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lack of interest
  • Motivation
  • Perceived difficulty
  • Career guidance
  • Diverse opportunities
  • Social media influence
  • Trendy fields
  • Outdated curriculum
  • Modern relevance
  • Engagement
  • Technological advancement
  • Economic growth
  • Public health
  • Innovation
  • Sustainability
  • Skilled workforce
  • Knowledge economy
  • Research and development
  • Scientific literacy
  • Global competitiveness
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