IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

Some people believe that it is good for students to have the same teacher for several years. Others think students benefit more from having new teachers each year. Which do you think is better? Give specific reasons to support your opinion.

#people #students #teacher #years #benefit #teachers #year #support
Education is a key right for every student. There are people who opine that it is good for
students
' growth to have
a
Change the article
the
show examples
 same instructor for a long period of time.
However
, others consider that learners should learn from new instructors every year for better understanding. I completely agree with the latter part and will give reasons in an essay. There are several reasons to learn from a new educator every year.
Firstly
, the curriculum has
been
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
changed in educational institutions every year,
hence
 it is difficult to acquire knowledge in various subjects from
one
 person.
For example
, an educator has completed his education in statistics so he could teach
this
 subject only and not others.
Furthermore
,
this
 system can bring out
students
 of their comfort zones , as for every subject they are interacting with different teachers which enhances their confidence and improve cognitive skills. Their dependence on
one
 person would be demolished.
Moreover
, if
students
 are taking knowledge from
one
 teacher
then
 learning will become monotonous as she has the same pattern for teaching each subject which leads to
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
dissatisfaction
of
Change preposition
with
show examples
 the education system among
students
. Poor performance could be the end result of a learning system. Pupils have limited sources of information as they are
reliable
Replace the word
reliant
show examples
 on
one
 person. In conclusion, I believe that
students
 should learn from a new educator for their wholistic development.
Submitted by himalibhavsar7 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: