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Children of ages 7-11 now spend more time watching television and/or playing video games than before. What are the effects of this on children, Family and society? What are the possible solutions to this situation.

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Nowadays,
children
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 the ages of 7 and 11 years spend
a
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 majority of their spare
time
 in front of the television. Even a greater number of these
children
 can spend a whole day playing computer or
video
games
.
This
 essay aims at highlighting the effects 
this
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 trend and
it's
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 possible solutions. It is not unusual to discover that a
child
 of elementary
school
 age suddenly starts to get poor grades in
school
as a result
 of spending more
time
 playing
video
games
.
This
 could happen over a long period, say one year as these
games
 become addictive over
time
. Another effect is
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 in social
life
 as these
children
 no longer go to the parks to play, they would rather be
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indoors
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in-doors
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indoors
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 playing
their
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video
games
 or
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watching
warching
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watching
 a movie.
Thus
 they become social misfits and live a secluded
life
.
Also
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 they could become
school
drop-outs
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 due to poor grades and as
such
 could turn to crime as they have been exposed to gun violence on TV.
This
 trend can be curbed when parents draw up a schedule for their
children
.
This
 schedule can indicate
time
 allocated for various activities after
school
 like nap
time
,
play
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playtime
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time
 and study
time
. Weekends could be allocated for movies or playing
games
 depending on the agreement between the
child
 and parents. In
this
 way, there will be
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all
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 round development of the
child
, as social and educational aspects of his or her
life
 will be balanced. In conclusion, we have seen the effects of too many movies and
video
games
 on the
life
 of a
child
. Parents and teachers alike are meant to take note of these effects and proffer solutions as described above for the overall benefit of the
child
.
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