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Some people think students should study on science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time km important subjects.

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There are different opinions about
that
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the teaching of different
subjects
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school
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. While some argue that students hate to
study
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 the
science
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 of
food
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 and way to make ready it,
other
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others
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 claim that they should learn on necessary
subjects
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. On my part, I believe that they should
study
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 both of the
subjects
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 because
,
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 they will need
it their
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 throughout their life. To commence with the view on the former group. There are two reasons behind their position.
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 is that students spend time
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study
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science
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the science
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 of
food
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. It will be effective for them. They learn how to cook and prepare
food
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.
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, they are able to prepare sweet dishes for their family and relatives.
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,
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science
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 of
food
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 is related
with
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 academic
subjects
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,
such
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 as biology, chemistry and technology. Definitely, other arguments exist too, but the ones mentioned, I believe, do stand out. Turning to the letter group's point of view, they
also
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 have their group
to
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justify the position they hold,
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first
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 all of
they
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 should
study
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 only important
subjects
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 in
school
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.
In addition
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, Studying
exist
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science
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 plays
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in
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 important role in life.
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, we use it in daily life,
such
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 as
maths
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 and physics. It helps to solve
everyday
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the everyday
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calculation
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calculations
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. The availability of other arguments is undeniable, but mentioning them is not worthy. In conclusion,
although
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 the opinions of people they ought to
study
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school
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subjects
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. It is so necessary for them. I personally believe in
school
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, researching
health
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healthy
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food
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 and nutrition
subjects
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 studying. Probably it has more beneficial about
improve
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improving
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 lifestyle.
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