In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

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recent decades, more and more old people chose to live with otherS in
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nursing house. But A hotly debated topic is the government or the family should pay for
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and foremost, family members have to BE responsible for their parents and grandparents. In
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way of saying, taking care of THE ELDERLY in
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is a tradition and gratitude to them and
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house.
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, in Vietnam, ALMOST ALL grandparents live with their children and grandchildren in the nuclear family, if old people live IN nursing
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, the family will pay for
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point, if the government haS to pay for living in a nursing home for the old,
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will put pressure on the state budget. It means that the government’s money is used to pay for more suitable things
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unemployment benefits, health insurance, and support for the poor, … To jump to
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, the family should pay
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for
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living of old people in the nursing house.
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shows THE responsibility of the members and reduces pressure on the state budget.
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  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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