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The table compares the number of
visitors
 to Ashdown
Museum
 before and after refurbishment. While the pie charts describe the proportion of
visitors
' satisfaction during those two periods. Overall, the number of
visitors
 increased significantly after
renovation
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 of the
museum
.
Moreover
, most of them were markedly satisfied with their visit. Before improvements, the annual visits to the
museum
 accounted for 74.000 people.
This
 figure raised by about 20% after the renovation process; reaching 92.000
visitors
 in the following year. Surveys were held to measure
satisfaction
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the satisfaction
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 of individuals who went to the
museum
. Before refurbishments, 50% of
visitors
 did not enjoy their time there.
However
, after renewing the
museum
, that percentage dropped to only 20%. Only 40% of people liked the
museum
 right before the renovation, but after
developments
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 the proportion
was
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nearly doubled to reach 75% of the whole
visitors
. Only 5% of the
visitors
 did not participate in the survey.
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