IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other counties have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#economy #goods #basics #counties #distance
A fair amount of the public believes that due to globalisation, some items of our daily use which are produced by other nations are important to transport over their destination place. despite some cons of
this
 trend ,I believe that the merits have an edge over the demerits. one of the main advantages is that people get good quality products as the competition between countries increases .when multinational companies want to sell their manufactured items like mobile phones ,cars and washing machines they will use the best material to manufacture them and
also
 they will keep their prices reasonable. through
this
 ,the consumers will get numerous options or choices with respect to products.along with
this
,they will only purchase commodities which will have a guarantee period and have
less
Add an article
a less
show examples
 environmental impact.
consequently
,local communities will be benefited as they will have plenty of options.
Besides
this
, both countries which produce products as well as those that receive them get economic prosperity. Owing to
this
, earnings of some proportion of the public
escalates
Correct subject-verb agreement
escalate
show examples
.the economy
who
Correct pronoun usage
that
show examples
want
Correct subject-verb agreement
wants
show examples
 to sell their goods in other nations
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
show examples
 to open industries and
also
 require manpower to handle their business .by
this
,lot of people will get a job and some industries will
also
 be opened.the workers who will get a job can be either from an investing country or the targeted nation .
as a result
 ,the living standard of the public will improve.
in contrast
, the local industry may be ruined.
this
 is due to the fact that competition will upsurge by which people lost their jobs. to conclude ,
although
 globalisation increases competition ,I firmly believe that it has plenty of pros namely providing job opportunities and industrialisation which cannot be ignored.
Submitted by ramandeepkaurkaila1 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: