In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

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Some members of
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society
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working harder either in
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the workplace
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or in
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sectors, because of money and career.
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, because of
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they can face problems physically and mentally. There are numerous causes
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individuals are working
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harder and
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extra effort.
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, people
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extra
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because of money because they want to make their future comfortable or provide good education to their children,
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, they are doing overtime at work.
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, teachers
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the student
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student
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students
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to spend more and more
time
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with their books because if they spend much
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then
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they will get
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grade
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.
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, they can choose their major in
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the big
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sector
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sectors
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such
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,
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science,
doctor
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, and even
in
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space. Namely, a study
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CNC asked
scientist
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scientists
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and doctors in China about their success, answers were they used to study
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to 17 hours. If people are providing extra effort
in
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anywhere, they would face many problems.
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, those who are working in construction or in
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the industry
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sector
they
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often break their hand or leg. Because after walking 8 to 9 hours their body may
can
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not handle that pressure sometimes and they make
mistake
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,
consequently
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, it turns into an accident even sometimes it becomes the cause of death. Mental stress is common among learners who
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more
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with books because everybody wants to make
future
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the future
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brighter.
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, their mind cannot handle that pressure and in
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result, they cannot perform
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in
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the examination
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examination
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even
they
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though they
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may lose
the
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control of
the
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mind. For
instant
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, 56%
Bangladeshi
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of Bangladeshi
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HSC candidates
were
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failed because they were studying 14 to 15 hours. In conclusion, individuals
working
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extra for making future
amenity
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amenities
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and pupils
studying
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study
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hard for better occupations, whereas, by doing that it can be reasons
of
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health and inward problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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