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Today, many people use the internet and smartphones to transfer money to friends, family, and businesses.Is this a positive or negative development?

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 many individuals utilize the internet and phones to
transfer
money
 to family, relatives, and businesses. Is
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 affirmative and damaging evolution? In my opinion, it is positive to use
internet
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 and phone to
transfer
money
 for a better
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 with. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my
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standpoints
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stand points
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 with
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explanations
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. On the one hand, transferring
money
 via the Internet is so convenient that they can deal with numerous problems in daily life. In the past, if people wanted to
transfer
money
 to someone, they had to spend a great amount of time going to the banks and doing various receipts to be able to
transfer
money
 for someone. On the one hand, they may be hacked by cybercrime as they reveal too much personal information, like the number of credit cards on social media.
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, cybercrime may send banking users phishing emails, appealing
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 to click on links, so e-crime can hack their banking accounts to steal
money
. In conclusion, each individual ought to keep calm and be cautious of potential fraud;
however
, online
money
 transfers are a beneficial technological advancement.
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