Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

• In our modern life, many
students
try to learn new things that will be extremely beneficial for their
future
career
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. Few individuals point out that, the majority of institution
students
should learn
subjects
that they love,
although
some humans believe that they should only be allowed to
study
subjects
that will be worthwhile in the
future
life,
such
as
related
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to science and new
technology
. From my point of
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students
should try to learn information with will be
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beneficial
their
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lives. In
this
essay, I will discuss both points of individuals about university
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. • On the one hand, the majority of inhabitants believe that university
students
should be allowed to learn
informations
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that will be extremely worthwhile for their
future
life, especially about science and modern
technology
, because if they
study
new
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about modern
technology
, they are able to know about how to use them through that
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and it will be extremely beneficial for their
future
. According to some statistics
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,
many
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countries
students
prefer to
study
subjects
which will be important for their
future
rather than learning information that they want, because whenever they face difficulties, they can easily solve these difficulties based on the knowledge they have learned. •
On the other hand
, some people believe that
,
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students
should learn whatever they desire, because If
students
study
the subject they want, they can easily succeed because they enjoy everything they do and love their profession and it will be really easy to achieve their goals,
besides
that If they learn a subject they do not like, they will give up quickly if they face any setbacks. •
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some people think
students
should
study
whatever they like
,
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because they can learn them easily and other individuals think that
students
should
study
subjects
which will be worthwhile in the
future
. I think they should learn
subjects
which
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about
technology
and
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science
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science
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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