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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, one of the widely discussed issues is that many point out that adolescents who
study
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university
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, might learn their favourite topics whereas some subjects should be permitted to teach
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students
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 which will be beneficial in the near future especially related to technological gadgets and science. From my point of view,
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 in technological and scientific knowledge is able to open the door to get more opportunities. On the one hand, in the
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university
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students
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 should take only science.
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 with, technology has been developing for a couple of centuries,
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 these days a range of smartphones,
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smart watches
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 are many. If
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 generation
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 how to utilise new types of devices, they have to be taught during their
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 the majority of learners ought to
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 almost all general subjects
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 as mathematics, computer and so on. Another advantage is that in the future, everything will be operated. Even now in most
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employees work through the internet
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 reason, they need to know how to use mobile devices
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 as laptops.
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, in European countries like England, the major shops are working online,
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 workers managed to be employed from
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 and they would be a student
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university
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, some argue that people may read whatever they adore since it gives
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chance to
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 with
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 as a consequence, they are able to get more achievements. Take Italy as an example, the teachers are teaching some disciplines which
students
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 want. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account, I would suggest that the majority of human beings should major in scientific knowledge at
university
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. In my opinion, even lovely theme
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,
students
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 ought to explore more useful
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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