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People today increasingly use credit cards to make monthly purchases. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
cutting edge
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 technology
catch
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 the world. Appearing modern devices make
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life
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 more convenient and
ease
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easy
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,
a
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plethora of inventions are connected by purchasing daily products.
Credit
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 cards are used more and more every day. The pros outweigh
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 and
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 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of using
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 device and provide a logical conclusion. On the positive side, using
credit
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 cards is
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 part of modern
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. Society uses
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 technology, due to
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 allows
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 make online transactions from home. People do not need to go outside and drive
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 shops. In
21st
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 century,
a
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 salary of
employee
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an employee
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 goes to a
card
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.
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,
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a person
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person
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people
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 can manage online money
in
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 the application of their
bank
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. User can see their expenses
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 a month and allocate a budget on dreams in an online piggy
bank
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.
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, there are numerous benefits to
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 with
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credit
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a credit
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card
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cards
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Kaspi
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 has cashback when
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person
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a person
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buy
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 something online. Money can return
on
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 the
credit
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card
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. It can save money and allow purchasing something
one
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apply
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. On the negative side, there are a number of
fraud
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frauds
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 on the Internet. They can steal a fortune
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 if
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person
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a person
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lose
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 their
credit
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card
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. Everybody should be careful during making any transactions.
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,
a
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 password of
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card
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the card
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 is closed information
of
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 everyone, it is unnecessary to tell somebody the main information about identification in
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 phone conversation. To illustrate,
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person
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a person
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 can pretend to be a
bank
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 employee and ask
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 name of
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card
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the card
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 or
back
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the back
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 side of
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. In conclusion,
credit
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 cards facilitate
a
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life
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 simplification.
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 using a
credit
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card
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 can have certain negative effects like
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a swindle
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swindle
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, it has an extremely positive influence on handy
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. I believe that the benefits of
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 outweigh its drawbacks.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cashless transactions
  • Financial footprint
  • Interest rates
  • Credit score
  • Consumerism
  • Debt accumulation
  • Expenditure tracking
  • Fraudulent activities
  • Overspending
  • Purchase protection
  • Revolving credit
  • Creditworthiness
  • Impulse buying
  • Secured credit card
  • Unsecured credit card
  • Spending limit
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