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Some people say that self employment is better than a job in a country or an institution. Discuss both modes of work and give your opinion.

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Several folks say that
self employment
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self-employment
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 is better than
normal
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a normal
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 9-5
job
 in a company owned by
country
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a country
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 or an institution. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
 because it has
it's
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its
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 own
benefit
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benefits
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 and
risk
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risks
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,
also
, it depends
in
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 many factors behind it. Working as a
self
 employee whether it is
in
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in-home
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home
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a home
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 business or
technology related
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technology-related
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 business that can be done from
home
, has
it's
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its
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 own perks from not having to spare
out
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money for living
cost
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costs
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 especially if you are still living with your parent, transportation and meal
cost
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costs
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.
Although
,
self employment
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self-employment
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 is harder to do if you dislike working by yourself and it is already proven that working from
home
 has
a
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apply
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longer and
un-identifiable
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unidentifiable
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 working hours,
thus
, making the workers prone to get stress easier. The wage for
self
employnment
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employment
also
 oftentimes is not stable and has a higher risk if they get played by the clients.
In
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the other
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other hand
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another hand
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, working
normal
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a normal
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 9-5
job
 even if it is costlier than from
home
, but
it
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apply
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has
it's
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its
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 own perks like
stable
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a stable
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 income, interacting with coworkers and
has
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having
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 a chance to go outside from
home
 and having
a
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me time after
work
 hours end.
Furthermore
,
besides
 being costlier,
other
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another
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 flaw
from
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of
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this
 type of
work
 is that if you have an atrocious boss or coworkers, you can suffer from it because there are many cases of
work
 power
abusement
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abuse
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 and
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harassment
harrasment
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harassment
 that push the workers to quit.
The
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for
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of
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this
,
in
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is in
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 one of
national
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a national
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university
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universities
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 in Indonesia, there is
a
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power abuse by the rectorate to the professors, because they do not want to graduate
a
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with a
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doctorate
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candidate
canditate
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candidate
.
This
 happens because
for
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 the professors, the candidate does not legible to graduate yet and it's already
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backed
backen
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backed
 up by logical reasons, but from the start the rectorate
want
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wants
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 the
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candidate
canditate
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candidate
 to graduate because they already got paid by the candidate. To sum up, I disagree that
self
employnment
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employment
 is better than a normal
job
 because
besides
 depending on people which they prefer the most.
Moreover
, I
also
thinking
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think
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 that having a normal, stable
job
 and proper
work
hour
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hours
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 is way more important and
secured
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secure
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.
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