Some people say that self employment is better than a job in a country or an institution. Discuss both modes of work and give your opinion.

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Several folks say that

self-employment

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is better than a normal 9-5 career in a company owned by a country or an institution. In my opinion, I disagree with

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because it has its

benefit

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and

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, it depends on many factors behind it. Working as a

self

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self-employed

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employee whether it is an in-

home

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business or technology-related business that can be done from

home

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, has its perks from not having to spare money for living costs especially if you are still living with your parent, transportation, and meal costs.

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self-employment

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is harder to do if you dislike working by yourself and it is already proven that working from

home

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has longer and unidentifiable working hours,

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, making the workers prone to

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stress

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. The wage for

self-employment

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oftentimes is not stable and has a higher risk if they get played by the clients.

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, working a normal 9-5 career even if it is costlier than from

home

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, has its perks like a stable income, interacting with coworkers, and having a chance to go outside from

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and have a relaxing time after

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hours end.

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being costlier, another flaw of

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type of

work

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is that if you have an atrocious boss or coworkers, you can suffer from it because there are many cases of

work

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power abuse and harassment that push the workers to quit. An example of

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is in one of the national universities in Indonesia, there is power abuse by the rectorate to the professors because they do not want to graduate a doctorate applicant.

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happens because, for the professors, the candidate

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not

legible

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to graduate yet and it's already backed up by logical reasons, but from the start, the rectorate wants the applicant to graduate because they already got paid by the candidate.

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, I disagree that

self-employment

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is better than a normal job because

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depending on people which they prefer the most.

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, I

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think that having a normal, stable job and proper

work

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hours is way more important and secure.

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The essay provides an adequate structure and addresses the prompt but lacks clarity in presenting comprehensive ideas and supporting examples. The introduction and conclusion should be more explicitly presented and tied to the main points.

task achievement

The essay adequately responds to the prompt by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of both self-employment and 9-5 careers. However, the ideas should be more closely related to the topic and provide clearer arguments to support the opinion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

351 words

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Some people say that self employment is better than a job in a country or an institution. Discuss both modes of work and give your opinion.

Many people today find they have insufficient time to spend with their families, bacause of pressures of work.What problems does this create for individuals and their families?what solutions can you propose ?which would be the most effective solution, in your view?

you are looking for a full-time job. write a letter to an employment agency. in your letter: Introduce yourself. Explain what sort of job you would like. Say what experience and skills you have you should write at least 150 words you should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

It is not necessary to travel for getting knowledge because books provided you with same

Some people believe that traditional teaching methods are more effective than modern digital approaches. Discuss both views and give your opinion.