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Some people think that only staff who worked in a company for a long time should be promoted to a higher position. What's your opinion?

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It is clear that there are many important factors to select an employee to be promoted to a higher position.
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 the length of service plays a major role when it comes to internal promotion, I think that other criteria should be considered more
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. Employees who have been working for a business for a large number of years should be promoted for a variety of reasons. One of those is that those employees have been familiar with their
company
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's operations and policies.
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 means that they are readily adaptable to existing procedures and handle business-related issues more effectively thanks to their many years of work experience.
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, if they were not promoted to a senior position with a well-paid salary, they would leave the
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.
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,
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 could cause the
company
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 to lose a highly qualified person, which makes it harder for it to compete with other competitors.
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, an individual's excellent performance and the ability to listen to other co-workers are viewed as important elements to getting promoted for a variety of reasons.
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, highly qualified individuals, even if they just worked for a few months or years, should deserve a promotion to ensure justice. In fact, they could not only adopt new approaches to handling complex issues but
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 devise many feasible plans to develop the
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.
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, by listening to other staff members' ideas, a manager can apply the best solutions for projects.
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, my current senior manager, who just joined the
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 just over one year, has secured a large number of large contracts with some corporations as he always refers to his colleagues' ideas to come up with creative proposals as well as strategies, contributing to increasing the
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's revenue. In conclusion,
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 implementing a policy of promoting long-serving members is often recommended, I believe that it is
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 wise to take the performance and the ability to listen to others into consideration.
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