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Some people think that schools should reward students with the best academic results, while others believe it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #schools #reward #students #results #show #improvements
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performance
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reward
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 significantly. Several individuals consider that schools must
reward
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students
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 who got the best academic
results
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, but others suppose it is more significant to
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students
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the
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enhancement in their academic
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.
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encouragement
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better and
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reward
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 issue, many
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 help to improve their academic
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 by their
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, who might provide
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them
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student
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a student
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 who got
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excellence regarding
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academic result can consider unfair and
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have independence
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independence
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on
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 their family due to their
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 of
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 can lead to frustration in all aspects of their life.
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, if schools may make
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 every week and engorgement all
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results
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, it can be
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fair. As
result
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, because of academic
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, we should not
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students
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, rely on other things to make them better
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 an impressive idea On
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other hand
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 of
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 issue,
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student's
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students'
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performance
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. To clear
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 are genius but they need only
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 forward to
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 their best.
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 several
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 in other ways regardless
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can be ruling
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level
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 of them in order to perform integral
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think
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incentive to
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 in all aspects of education. To
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summarize
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summarise
, it might not be possible to cover all aspects of
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encouragement
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better and
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reward
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. The most important points
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 been mentioned are we should
encouragement
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 the
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 to
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their
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 circumstance and
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student
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 it a gadget way to incentive educational
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level
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in
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 all sides.
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, it can be said that all
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 possess traits in
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the educational
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 field, but most of them
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 motivation to
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 their best.
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