Some people think that schools should reward students with the best academic results, while others believe it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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performance
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significantly. Several individuals consider that schools must
reward
students
who got the best academic
results
, but others suppose it is more significant to
reward
the
students
who
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enhancement in their academic
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.
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encouragement
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better and
performance
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.
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hand of
this
issue, many
students
help to improve their academic
results
by their
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families
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, who might provide
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them
tutors
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.
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mean,
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student
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a student
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who got
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excellence regarding
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academic result can consider unfair and
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other
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their family due to their
level
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can lead to frustration in all aspects of their life.
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every week and engorgement all
students
to
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regardless
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results
, it can be
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fair. As
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of
this
, because of academic
performance
, we should not
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the
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educational
performance
justify,
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an impressive idea On
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other hand
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of
this
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can enhance
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students'
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performance
. To clear
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, many
students
are genius but they need only
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forward to
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their best.
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,
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several
students
in other ways regardless
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results
,
it
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can be ruling
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level
of them in order to perform integral
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, in my
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incentive to
students
in all aspects of education. To
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summarize
summrize
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, it might not be possible to cover all aspects of
this
issue.
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,
this
essay focuses only on
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encouragement
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better and
performance
reward
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rewards
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. The most important points
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been mentioned are we should
encouragement
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the
student
to
level
up their educational
results
regardless
their
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circumstance and
reward
the
student
it a gadget way to incentive educational
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in
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all sides.
Finally
, it can be said that all
student
possess traits in
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field, but most of them
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motivation to
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their best.
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