Nowadays the majority of humans utilize the internet and mobile phones to transfer cash to friends relatives and busines whether using internet to transport money is a negative or a positive trend among individuals. From my point of view, utelizing smartphone is a positive development.

Nowadays the majority of humans utilize the
internet
and mobile phones to
transfer
cash to friends relatives and
busines
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business
whether using
internet
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the internet
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to transport
money
is a negative or a positive trend among individuals. From my point of view,
utelizing
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utilising
smartphone is a positive development. There is no doubt that
to
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transferring
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transfer
cash via
internet
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the internet
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have
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coused
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caused
more merits than problems. For one In
this
way, it saves
people
's time, because
people
can pay by phone without going out,
for example
, according to statistics, 80% of the world's
people
use the
Internet
and smartphones to
transfer
In addition
to that, it is very useful for
people
, which is easy and convenient, because most
people
have many options in
this
regard,
for example
, the most important thing is that many students' parents can get
money
without problems on their phones
. .
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One of the most negative effects is that it is not very safe because today there are more and more hackers who can withdraw
money
from your account at any time. In
this
way, it saves
people
's time, because
people
can pay by phone without going out,
for example
, according to statistics, 80% of the world's
people
use the
Internet
and smartphones to
transfer
money
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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