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Nowadays the majority of humans utilize the internet and mobile phones to transfer cash to friends relatives and busines whether using internet to transport money is a negative or a positive trend among individuals. From my point of view, utelizing smartphone is a positive development.

Nowadays the majority of humans utilize the
internet
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 and mobile phones to
transfer
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 cash to friends relatives and
busines
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business
 whether using
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internet
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the internet
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 to transport
money
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 is a negative or a positive trend among individuals. From my point of view,
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utilising
 smartphone is a positive development. There is no doubt that
to
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transferring
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transfer
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 cash via
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internet
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the internet
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have
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coused
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caused
 more merits than problems. For one In
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 way, it saves
people
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's time, because
people
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 can pay by phone without going out,
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, according to statistics, 80% of the world's
people
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 use the
Internet
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 and smartphones to
transfer
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In addition
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 to that, it is very useful for
people
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, which is easy and convenient, because most
people
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 have many options in
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 regard,
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, the most important thing is that many students' parents can get
money
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 without problems on their phones
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One of the most negative effects is that it is not very safe because today there are more and more hackers who can withdraw
money
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 from your account at any time. In
this
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 way, it saves
people
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's time, because
people
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 can pay by phone without going out,
for example
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, according to statistics, 80% of the world's
people
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 use the
Internet
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 and smartphones to
transfer
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money
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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