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You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter: Explain why you want to do the voluntary work. State what your skills and experience are. Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir / Madam You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

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Dear Sir. I am writing in concern with a possible social work I’d like to do in the near future because, I believe in giving back to
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society, and I feel my engineering, teaching and cooking skills can be useful. People in
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developing nations, do not have the resources to
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 their needs and I would like to make an impact in their lives by doing some voluntary work through your company, Culture Expeditions, as I believe in equality. I have a master’s degree in engineering, So I can help them build houses, bridges or a school. Cooking is one of my favourite
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 and I can contribute
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African families in community kitchens. Apart from that, I can
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high school kids for
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 better future. During my graduate studies at
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Auburn University,
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 across a lot of students from
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Africa, whose family was struggling back home, to satisfy their daily needs. Due to that, I would like to go to a country in
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Africa for voluntary work and give back to
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society. I would wait to hear from you.
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 Faithfully, Vimal Thakkar
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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