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Some people think that higher institutions should concentrate more on academic subjects such as history and physical science while others say that they should concentrate on practical subject such as mechanics and cookery etc. Discuss both views and give your opinion

There is a belief that academic
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history
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 and physical science should be promoted the most by universities.
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, others think higher institutions should concentrate on particular
subjects
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 like mechanics and cookery etc. In my opinion,
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 learning
history
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 and philosophy can derive a lot of benefits to the community, the modern
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 requires "human resources" to deal with pacing progress. In
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 situation and express my own opinion. Observing one point of view, academic
subjects
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 should be learnt by students of higher institutions due to a lack of knowledge in our society. Even though the
history
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 of the greatest political situations
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 as the revolution in France or the rebel in China can give people plenty of examples of how a tiny problem can cause huge consequences and how to prevent it, our modern
world
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 is the biggest example of it, there are only
few
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 of scientists who know
history
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 well.
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, the disasters like Vietnam and Afghanistan are particularly the same situations,
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, they happened twice.
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, mechanics, computer scientists, and software developers are building our
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 right now. There is a wide range of inventions created by these people that upgraded our convenience and level of our life.
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,
internet
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the internet
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, PC, buildings with a high level of
comfortability
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, and fast transport system are the smallest part of things that were invented in
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 century.
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, it helps
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students from all over the
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 to study even
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.
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, concentration on practical
subjects
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 can benefit even in terms of academic science. To conclude, academic disciplines can improve
mental
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the mental
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 level of our society, while particular ones improve
physical
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the physical
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 part of our
world
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.
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, people have to learn both disciplines to upgrade the Earth profoundly.

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