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These days more and more people are going to other counrties for significant period of time either to find a job or study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays it is becoming more common to move to foreign countries for a long time in order to search for a job or obtain a degree. Undoubtedly, there are quite a few advantages
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, individuals who have moved from their homeland to another
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 experience challenges of different kinds. The pros and cons of living overseas will be examined in the essay.
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. Certainly,
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 tendency has quite a few benefits.
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 and foremost, having moved to another
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 a person often chooses to live in a
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 with a good climate.
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, statistics have shown that thousands of migrants move to Spain from the UK every year due to the excellent Spanish weather where they feel happier and healthier.
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 of living abroad might be higher salaries and better opportunities in terms of
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 ladder.
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, developers from all over the world prefer working in the USA to developing countries
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 as India or Mexico because of the opportunities America can suggest.
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, sometimes it is worth it to go to live abroad.
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, foreigners may well face certain challenges when they have moved overseas.
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, it might be difficult for some individuals to adjust to
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 routine and culture.
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, having migrated to Turkey from Russia a person might find the local road traffic and a lack of traffic lights in suburbs shocking.
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, it is highly likely that it will be difficult for certain people to get used to local traditions and mentality.
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, it is vital to estimate
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 and drawbacks before moving to a foreign
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. In conclusion, even though living abroad has plentiful advantages it is important to take into account possible cons before going there.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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