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Some people say that History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?

#people #history #school #subjects #today’s #world #science #technology
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A group of
people
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 opine that
history
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 subject is most vital in school
while
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 some
other
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others
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 view that
technology
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 and
science
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 are more significant than
history
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. I will support the latter proposition and will discuss
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along
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 my view. First of all,
history
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 is a very crucial part
in
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 our
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, which
help
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helps
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 us to know our previous events and
help
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 us to plan
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 future, because from previous we can
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hour
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our
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 faults.
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, in Bangladesh,
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 saw most of the
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died
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for
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from
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 drinking ponds water after floods, so that after inuvation government
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 plenty of safe water, which
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 from
history
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.
Secondly
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, from
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history
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history,
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 we know previous peoples
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life style
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lifestyle
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, culture and
their
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apply
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daily activities, which help to enrich our knowledge.
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, from
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books
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books,
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 we know our
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world's
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 first
life
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 about dinosaur events, ancient empire and their lifestyle, which help us to clear concept
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of how
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 to earth
become
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 changing.
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, there are many
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 who are in favour of
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science
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 and
technology
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. Fastly,
science
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 is
most
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the most
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 important
factors
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factor
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 in our daily
life
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. It is impossible to think without
science
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,
with
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which
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 help our
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 easier. We can do many works within short periods.
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,
car
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the car
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 is
invention
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the invention
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 of modern
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 which made our destination very short.
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,
technology
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are
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has
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 expanded our lifespan, so
human
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humans
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 are
leaving
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living
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 more than before even standard
life
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also
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. To illustration. X-ray machine is
invention
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 of modern
technology
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, which help to detect
disceret
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different
 types of disease,
as a result
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, patients
in entails
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 early facilities to receive treatment. In conclusion, it is obvious that modern
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 and
science
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 help to create our modern
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, as it consequence,
people
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 are enjoying they are
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 so I restate my opinion again.
Today's
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 contest,
science
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 and
technology
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 are gaining more
popularly
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 and utility.
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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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