You recently went shopping at a department store and you were disrespected by by one of the employees.

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to complain about the impolite and disrespectful behaviour of your sales representative Sir. I was at your department store on the
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of August for making some routine purchases and he behaved rather rudely
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me.
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I am able to find all the products I need but on that particular day, I could not find the hair shampoo of a specific brand and
hence
I asked for help. But
instead
of helping me Sir arrogantly told me to choose a shampoo of some other brand or purchase it from somewhere else. I found
this
behaviour very insulting.
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while buying the rest of the items I observed that he did not want to work or help any of the customers as he was just slacking around and chatting with other staff members. It is said that one rotten fruit can spoil the entire basket. I have a feeling that he is a negative influence on other staff as well and may even destroy the reputation of your store . I hope you will take care of
this
issue and improve the store's customer service. Your's faithfully Nappi
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