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Do you think that people who work online at home are more productive than office workers or the other way around? Give reasons and examples to support your answer.

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In our time, most people have online
work
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 and
everyday
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an everyday
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 number of remote professions
are
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is
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extend
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. I completely disagree with
this
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 opinion that online
work
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more
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is more
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productice
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productive
 for several reasons explained in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
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, if people
work
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 online at home, they will allow them more relaxation and laziness than people who
work
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 in the office.
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, they allow to sleep more, do not matter about their appearance because nobody is looking at them
and
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apply
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one of the main negative causes of working at home,
if
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person
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a person
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do
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 not live alone and
have
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 small children,
it
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they
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 will be constantly distracted and lead to the decline of productivity.
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However
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 workers in
office
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the office
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 have
a strict schedules
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a strict schedule
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 and they pay attention only to their goals.
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, remote professions limit
to
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the ability to
work
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 in a
team
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. It means that
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work
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working
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 in a
team
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help
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 to keep in good shape,
therefore
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 staff member the responsibility for the whole
team
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 and labour stay more
productivity
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productive
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 when
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team
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a team
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 works face to face together and contributes to
team
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 building for the
next
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 projects. In short, I believed that
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work
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working
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 in the office brings
the
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apply
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more
achive
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achieve
active
the
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apply
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goals than online
work
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 because it provides myriad benefits to the company as well as to the employee.
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