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Some workers work for the same organization whole their life while others think it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
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work
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 for a specific company all their life but
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others find it better to change the organization they are working in. I believe that changing jobs and working in different environments helps
people
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 to experience more things. When
people
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 enter a company, they may stay and
work
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 there for the rest of their lives for several reasons.
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 of all, working in an organization for several years can have financial advantages,
people
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 can be promoted in their
job
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 since they get more
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 in their
work
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 field and become experts in that.
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, some
people
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 get
accoustomed
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accustomed
 to their
work
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 environment and colleagues so much that they become scared to change their
job
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 because they are not sure that if they alter their
job
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 they will become more successful.
For instance
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, I once had a conversation with two of my relatives whom I knew were not really satisfied with their
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 and I asked them what stops
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 from changing it? The answer I got was the same, "fear of changing a routine situation".
On the other hand
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, some other
people
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 actually think that changing their jobs and working for different organizations help them to progress, it makes them not to be stuck in one place and experience different kind of
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 which eventually helps them with their life too.
Although
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this
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 mindset has some disadvantages too, it may cause
people
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 to choose a
job
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 wrongfully which makes their situation worse but as a whole, if you do not tend to risk
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things, it is unlikely for new opportunities to come
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your way. In conclusion, changing jobs can have its advantages and disadvantages. But in my point of view, if
people
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 are not satisfied with their current
job
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, it is better for them to try a new one but it needs to be chosen wisely in order for them to be developed.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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