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Modern medical science has made it possible to combat many diseases. This is one reason that people are living longer lives now than they did in the past. Discuss the effects this might have on society.

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These days, the health technology boom helps reduce mortality rates and makes
people
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 live longer than before.
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, it increases the world's
population
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 ,which has both positive and negative
effects
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. In
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 begin by looking at the positive sides. Modern medical science has made
people
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 live healthier which grows the productivity of the labour market. And it
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 increases the world's citizens, putting the society into a gold
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.
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, these things boost the economy of the country on a higher level.
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, thanks to the investigation of Corona vaccine, many
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 were counteracted from the disease.
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, there are several negative
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 on society due to longevity. There is no doubt that medical treatment expands the ability of longer living,
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,
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 could lead to an ageing
population
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 in the
long-term
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. Too many elderly can burden young
people
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, they have to work more and pay more taxes than in the past. Not only does putting higher pressure on work
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,
ageing
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population
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 creates a heavy burden on the health care system. Take Japan as an example,
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 country has a lot of older
people
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, so makes
healthcare
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 system more overload because of the shortage of nurses and doctors. To tackle
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 problem, Japan government employs immigrant
nurse
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 from developing countries and sets higher retirement age in order to encourage the elderly to contribute to society. In conclusion, a huge number of
people
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 has both positive and negative
effects
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. Government should
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 action to balance two sides of
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  • retirement age
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