Academic Task 2 Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think that parents who do not decide
public
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schools
as their
children
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children's
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formal
education
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do no
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no
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not
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need to pay
taxes
related to universal
education
. I should say that I disagree whit
this
opinion, certain reasons according to
this
will
be
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further
explain in the essay. It may not seem fair to the
families
who do not send their
children
to government-financed
schools
to keep
pay
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paying
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educational
taxes
.
However
,
taxes
that refer to universal
education
aim to create a good quality of
education
in one country.
Fistly
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Firstly
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,
this
will be beneficial for all students in the country, especially for whom is come from
the
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poor family. Additional
taxes
from the
families
who choose private
schools
for their
children
can keep the same quality of
education
troughout
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throughout
the whole state.
For example
, In
indonesia
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Indonesia
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, public
schools
usually do not
allowed
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allow
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their pupils to take home school books because
the
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lack of books quantity in the
schools
.
Therefore
,
taxes
which
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paid by the
families
who prefer private
schools
can help provide enough books in public
schools
.
Secondly
, when there
is
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are
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no laws for universal
education
taxes
, the social gap may seem more
clearly
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clear
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in
the
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society.
Families
who choose
non public
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non-public
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schools
as
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for
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their
children
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children's
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education
needs tend to have more wealth than the
one
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ones
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who
choose
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chooses
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government-financed
schools
. If the rich do not pay universal
education
taxes
, it is likely to create
wider
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a wider
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gap
among
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in
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the
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society. To illustrate, private
schools
usually have better facilities inside the
schools
. When students from two
kind
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kinds
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of
schools
meet, they
unlikely
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are unlikely
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to have the same experiences during their school activities,
this
is because
a major differences
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major differences
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of
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in
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school facilities
from
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between
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both
type
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types
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of
schools
. To conclude, it is better for all
families
to pay
the
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apply
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universal
education
taxes
in order to create good quality
of
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apply
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education
which can
be happen
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to all pupils in the country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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