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Academic Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people think that parents who do not decide
public
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schools
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 as their
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children
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children's
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 formal
education
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do no
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no
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not
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 need to pay
taxes
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 related to universal
education
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. I should say that I disagree whit
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 opinion, certain reasons according to
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 will
be
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 explain in the essay. It may not seem fair to the
families
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 who do not send their
children
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 to government-financed
schools
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 to keep
pay
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 educational
taxes
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.
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,
taxes
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 that refer to universal
education
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 aim to create a good quality of
education
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 in one country.
Fistly
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,
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 will be beneficial for all students in the country, especially for whom is come from
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poor family. Additional
taxes
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 from the
families
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 who choose private
schools
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 for their
children
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 can keep the same quality of
education
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troughout
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throughout
 the whole state.
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, In
indonesia
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, public
schools
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 usually do not
allowed
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 their pupils to take home school books because
the
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 lack of books quantity in the
schools
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.
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,
taxes
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which
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paid by the
families
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 who prefer private
schools
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 can help provide enough books in public
schools
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.
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, when there
is
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 no laws for universal
education
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taxes
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, the social gap may seem more
clearly
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 in
the
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society.
Families
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 who choose
non public
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non-public
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schools
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as
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for
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 their
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children
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children's
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education
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 needs tend to have more wealth than the
one
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ones
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choose
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chooses
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 government-financed
schools
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. If the rich do not pay universal
education
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taxes
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, it is likely to create
wider
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a wider
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 gap
among
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the
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society. To illustrate, private
schools
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 usually have better facilities inside the
schools
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. When students from two
kind
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kinds
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 of
schools
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 meet, they
unlikely
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are unlikely
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 to have the same experiences during their school activities,
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 is because
a major differences
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major differences
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of
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in
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 school facilities
from
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between
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 both
type
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types
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 of
schools
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. To conclude, it is better for all
families
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 to pay
the
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universal
education
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taxes
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 in order to create good quality
of
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apply
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education
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 which can
be happen
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happen
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 to all pupils in the country.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Inequality
  • Socio-economic groups
  • Public good
  • Well-educated population
  • Double payment argument
  • Tax base
  • Infrastructure
  • Qualified teachers
  • Choice and privilege
  • Tax credits
  • Deductions
  • Exempting
  • Public education
  • Funding
  • Resources
  • Collective responsibility
  • Educational quality
  • Directly benefit
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