Some people think that having a set retirement age (eg- 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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Any workforce member should retire in one day. Many people
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for any employer except
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more money for their future elder lift.
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, they are applying the
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higher wages.
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good health in mind and body.
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careers, as they must be retiring and
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who are joining the before decades.
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permission
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they will face an accident. To sum up, pension
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is most beneficial for some careers.
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