Some people get into debt by buying things they don’t need and can’t afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What actions can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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people
purchase many things even if they cannot have enough money and it is not necessary. There are reasons
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contributing
to
this
phenomenon.
However
, there are solutions to
this
incident which I will explain in
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essay. The most important reasons are
advertisements
and social
media
effects
. The
first
reason for
this
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is that
advertisements
have many negative impacts on
people
.
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people
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are exposed to lots of
advertisements
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this circumstance
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they want to buy something
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unconsciously
. Another reason for
this
attitude is that social
media
effects
have a large number of bad impacts on society. Because, nowadays
people
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social platform so much,
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they might affect
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others. According to a great number of studies,
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huge
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effect
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on
community
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.
For example
, especially teenagers are
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by social platforms and they only want to consume
instead
of
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.
Nevertheless
, there are two possible solutions for
this
problem
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which
are improving education and preventing
advertisements
.
Firstly
,
people
should be educated about
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effects
of adverts. Namely, if
people
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informations
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about
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, they will think twice when
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they
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want to buy something.
Secondly
, governments ought to be limited some
advertisements
such
as shoes and furniture.
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their lives may be more responsible than others.
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practical
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to solve
this
issue. In conclusion, even though some
people
purchase things even if they do not need
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of
advertisements
and social
media
, the suggested solutions
which
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are developing awareness via education and limiting adverts. If we do not apply these ideas, there will be harmful consequences for
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.
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