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As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages? What is your view of this practice

#languages #english #spanish #mandarin #fear #minority #countries #steps #practice
There is no doubt that these days
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international
languages
such
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 become more spoken
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all over the world. The question is, is the number of
people
 who are spoken these
languages
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others
 minority
languages
? In
this
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this
 phenomenon and draw my own conclusions. In terms of advantages,
people
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 more knowledgeable
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others
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 cultures . The main reason given to support
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 travel between the countries will become
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easier
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 because they will be capable
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contacts
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with
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foreign
languages
 . To illustrate, if all
people
 in the world spoke
essential
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 language
such
 as English, they can communicate with each
others
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 fluently .
In other words
, education and healthcare and other several crucial things will
improved
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 and
this
 will provide the good side of globalisation.
However
, there are many drawbacks
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the
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globalisation.
Firstly
,
others
 minority
languages
 might
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.
In other words
,
people
they
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will forget their own
languages
.
Secondly
, the most
affect
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 will be
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new
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 generation.
This
 is because they will not grow with their native
languages
.
Hence
 , they will not feel they belong to
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 language. In conclusion, it is evident that there are many benefits
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when the majority of
people
spoken
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 global
languages
such
 as English ,
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 are drawbacks
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the
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globalisation .
Therefore
 I believe countries must ensure steps are taken to protect minority
languages
.
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