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The charts beneath indicate the percentage of consumption of three common ingredients which are sodium, saturated fat, and sugar in the USA.
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 told to be unhealthy if eaten more than average. In summary, the
first
 chart shows the use of sodium as it can be seen, the majority of consumption is for
dinner
 as it is 43% and other usages in decent order are, 29% for
lunch
 , and 14%
breakfast
 same as
snacks
.
In addition
, the
second
one
 is about saturated fat, the most percentage belonged to
dinner
 which is 37% the
next
 high
one
 is 26% for
lunch
 and the
last
 two ones are 21%
snacks
 and 16%
breakfast
.
Furthermore
, the
last
 chart is about added sugar the highest consumption is for
snacks
 which
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 42%, the
next
one
 with a great difference is
dinner
 which is 23% the
last
 two ones are
lunch
 which is 19% and 16% for
breakfast
.
Also
, the
second
 highest usage in all three charts belonged to
lunch
.
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 the least
one
 belonged to
breakfast
. In sharp contrast, the highest percentage for both sodium and fat was for
dinner
 but for added
sugar
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 it belonged to
snacks
. Overall,
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