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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Compare and contrast both views and give your opinion.

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some people indicate that the separation between pupils who have different
gender
 is the better way to education.
although
 ,others have the idea that a combination of two genders in one class could offer better effects on students.In my
opinion
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 different
gender
 could have a good influence on the educational system. on the one hand ,some people think separate vary pupils are helpful because of their
religion
 and they think that they should learn that they should take care themselves of damages that the other
gender
 may enter them.and they needed to know they may learn their field even better in separated
classes
. and
also
 the institute may hold some
classes
 where the students know more about their
gender
 and sexuality and their
religion
. for
an
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instant in Islamic
countries
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 you can see different
gender
classes
 because of their
religion
 and their rules.
on the other hand
 , other people believe that
gender
 separation is not sufficient for learning. I mean that the mix of pupils can help them in learning and they can learn more about
the
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communicating with other
gender
 and respect them more .and they can have better relations in their future workplace and college and even in their family.
for example
 in American countries the bars show that they have better relationships in their society because of their mix
gender
 educational system. to sum up, in different ,countries there are two views of holding classrooms, separated
gender
 and mixed
gender
classes
 which have different benefits . in every country because of their culture and their
religion
 they take different ways of learning.in my view
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mixed-
gender
classes
 are more professional and affordable for students.
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