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Plastic bags, plastic bottles, and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
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modern times,
plastic
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 bags,
bottles
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 as well as packaging are harmful
for
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 mother nature. Overuse of
this
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plastic
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 is a serious threat to the earth.
This
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 essay will highlight both the causes as well as solutions to solve
this
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 problem.
To begin
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 with, there are various facts that prove that
one
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 should stop using these poly sheets. Not only
plastic
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 has a long
life
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 span
for
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 approximately hundreds
years
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of years
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 but
also
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 recycling
such
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plastic
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 is very expensive. Another key factor is it kills
ocean
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life
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. to elaborate,
plastic
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 debris makes its way to
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ocean
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the ocean
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 from rivers, shorelines and boats. It
effects
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affects
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 all
kind
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kinds
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 of
ocean
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life
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.
For instance
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, animals get
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 and struck in these
bottle neck
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bottleneck
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 or intake these
plastic
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bottles
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 considering them as food.
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 these animals die, impacting
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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.
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,
plastic
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 kills terrestrial wildlife as well. To elaborate, due to hunger they intake
plastic
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 considering it as food as well as
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 tangled.
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 it impacts
there
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their
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 body and they die. as their numbers
decreases
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, the ecosystem shrink and weakens.
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, various steps can be taken by
authority
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 as well as
person
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people
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 to solve
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 issue.
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, an
indivudual
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individual
 can choose to replace
plstic
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plastic
 bags with biodegradable material
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 as jute. To elaborate,
human
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a human
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 can carry their own glass
bottles
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 while travelling so
that
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they
dont
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don't
 need to purchase
plastic
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one
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.
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, if we as
indivuals
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individuals
 stop buying
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plastic
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 stuff eventually their rate of selling
decreses
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decreases
.
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,
one
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 can contribute to
social
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a social
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cause
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causes
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 like picking up
plastic
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 from parks and beaches. to elaborate, while having a walk in green spaces
once
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one
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 can consciously choose to pick up
plastic
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 waste n put it into
trash
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the trash
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.
as a result
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, it will impact
huge
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a huge
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 amount of
ocean
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 and
terrestial
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terrestrial
life
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.
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Also
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 government can make a huge impact
on
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by
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 contributing to
reduce
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reducing
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 the
use
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 of
plastic
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.
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,
authority
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authorities
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 can ban
on
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apply
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companies that provide
plastic
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 materials that cant be recycled. To elaborate, if
plastic
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 bags and
bottles
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 will not be kept at
store
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the store
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 or
maket
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market
make
one
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 will not
use
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 it.
Beside
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this
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,
government
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the government
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 can put
a strong rules
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strong rules
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to
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on to
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use
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plastic
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of plastic
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 in
construction
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the construction
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 of roads. To elaborate, poly sheets will be used effectively and as a
reult
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result
 will not harm
environment
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the environment
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. In conclusion,
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use
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the use
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 of
plastic
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stuffs
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stuff
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are
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definately
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definitely
dangerious
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dangerous
 for mother earth. it harms the
life
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 in
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ocean
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the ocean
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 as well as
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the terrestial
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terrestial
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terrestrial
. Which
further
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result
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results
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 in
disturbance
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the disturbance
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 of
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ecological cycle. Certain steps by humans as well as by authority can play a huge role in solving the problem.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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