‘Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other.’ To what extent do you agree with this idea?

Many individuals
thinks
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that
tourism
it
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apply
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is the best way to make a good connection between
countries
and
population
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the population
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of different
countries
will have a good relationship with each other. Does it true or not ?
Firstly
,
tourism
it
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is
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the best way to connect
countries
with each other. I mean that many
people
know many
countries
, know where are they located , know the names of capitals maybe they know even traditional dishes or clothes and
that is
all. They do not know
peoples
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people's
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mentality , they do not
now
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know
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the history of
this
country
,do not know how
famouse
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famous
people
related
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are related
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with
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to
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this
country
etc. So,
this
is bad because individuals do not have full representation of
this
country
. Well, of
course
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,course
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they can watch different travelling TV shows but when you see it all in real life you have
another feelings
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another feeling
other feelings
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and you memorising better. So , after
trip
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the trip
a trip
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you will have
another thoughts
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another thought
other thoughts
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about
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the counrty
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counrty
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country
because you spoke with citizens , you were in
diifrent
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different
historical places and sow different sights.
Secondly
,
tourism
can improve the economic state of the
country
fore
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for
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example like in
the
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apply
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Turkey or Egypt.
In addition
, if you are
entrepreneur
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an entrepreneur
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and you want to
globolizate
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globalize
your business or company and sell your product in
the
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apply
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different markets. You have to understand what
people
like and what
people
do not like in
this
county or another.
However
,
tourism
has drawbacks because the tourist could be distracted
different
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by different
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ancsious
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anxious
building or monuments or if
county
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the county
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become popular for
torist
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tourist
tourists
many businessmen would start to build hostels in different areas of the city so it could be
conflict
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a conflict
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between citizens and these businessmen and tourist
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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