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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the life of humans,
teachers
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 always take an important role in developing their skills and generating good
behaviors
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, but some folks consider that the duty of
teachers
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 should be limited to providing necessary
subjects
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 only. Others claim that
teachers
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 might help pupils to aware of the right and the wrong decisions. In
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 with, people who favour that
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 are responsible to teach students about their behaviour, and skills have their rights.
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 of all, many students admit that their teacher is not only their instructor but
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 their friends, who can easily listen to their stories and empathize with them, unlike their
parents
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,
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 often keep their
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 busy with work so that they
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lack
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time
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children
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 about their problems but the lecturer is usually there to listen and show them the right path to follow.
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,
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 always nurture their dream and
teachers
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 are responsible for maintaining and developing them.
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, many young adults said that they have broadened a lot by the inspiration of their
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.
On the other hand
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, some people argue that
teachers
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 might mainly focus on compulsory
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 rather than other features,
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. Most of them claim that showing
the
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right and wrong to
children
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 is the duty of their
parents
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,
teachers
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 who
focusing
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real life
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 situations may lead their learners to the distraction of
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Other
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 striking feature is that
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 know their
children
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 better than the
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 so they would know how to treat them correctly. In conclusion,
this
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 essay is discussed whether the role of
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 is limited
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 academic
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 only or not. From my perspective, I think that
teachers
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 should help pupils in essential
subjects
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 as well as
real life
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real-life
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 issues
also
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