Some people believe women are better leaders than men. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many arguments say that
women
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higher
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quality to lead than men. My notion has
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position with
this
statement.
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,
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essay will explain
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and several examples
about
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the issue in depth.
To begin
with,
women
has
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capability
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the capability
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to organise people well,
nevertheless
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they do not plan clearly when they take a decision.
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condition is encouraged by
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their
subjectivness
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subjectiveness
subjective
to look at the problems,
hence
, they cannot resolve the issues
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different perspectives.
For instance
, Liz Trust, a former prime minister of the United Kingdom, imposed
low
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tax rule amid
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energy
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of energy
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.
Consequently
, many protests emerged in the UK,
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from her parliament.
As a result
, she resigned from her position after 2 weeks.
In addition
,
women
who involve their sensitive feeling in
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the work
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environment, often cannot distinguish the matter
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between
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their occupation and their personal life. If they are struggling with their family, they likely will be more
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in their office.
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,
the
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toxic environment is inevitable which will impact their team. According to my experience, my supervisor would anger if a worker made a small mistake.
As a result
,
grup
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group
discussion was halted without
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schedule for
next
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the next
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meeting.
Although
women
’s
feeling
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feelings
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can hamper
her
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their
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capability to be a
leader
, their
sensitivness
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sensitiveness
sensitive
is their power to reach out
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to many
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society’
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levels.
Therefore
,
women
leader
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leaders
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will be more
understand
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about
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the adversity which is
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in
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at
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marginal
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the marginal
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level. In conclusion, I disagree that
women
are better to be a
leader
than
man
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men
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. The quality of
women
is not sufficient to be a good
leader
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leaders
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than men, since their subjectiveness and their feeling will influence their capability when deciding crucial rules and
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their work environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional intelligence
  • democratic leadership
  • participation
  • collaboration
  • diverse leadership
  • decision-making
  • problem-solving
  • perspectives
  • compassionate
  • empathetic
  • supportive work environment
  • historical data
  • research
  • female-led businesses
  • financial performance
  • multitasking
  • managing complex projects
  • teams
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