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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestions

#city #traffic #congestions
• In our modern life transportation has been developing almost every day and nowadays one of the
most
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biggest issues faced by almost every large urban
areas
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 is traffic jams. The main reason for
this
 is that there are a number of private
cars
 on the
roads
 these days and a viable solution is
to
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 the
car
 tax should be increased. • The number of
people
 owning
car
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 increased day by day, with most families now having more than one
car
, because nowadays, everyone tries to drive their private
cars
instead
 of public transport like buses or taxis it is one of the most easiest and time-saving ways
,
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 because
cars
 are so expensive that
people
 spend a lot of time on the road.
For example
, in Tashkent, the capital of Uzbekistan, the
roads
 are too narrow and there are too many
cars
, which are the main reasons for traffic jams. • There are several solutions to these problems. the government should widen the
roads
 in big cities and increase the
car
 tax. If I take Singapore as an example, only rich
people
 drive
cars
 in Singapore and the
cars
 are very expensive and the common
people
 can not
afford
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 buy them and
also
 the
car
 tax is very high and
therefore
 there is not much traffic. • In conclusion, having
weighted
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 everything mentioned
up
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and I can come to
a
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 conclusion that,
now a days
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nowadays
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cars
 are getting more and more
people
 are finding it difficult to reach their destination by public
cars
 when they want and to prevent
this
 the government should widen the
roads
 and increase all the
car
 charges.
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