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Band 4.5

One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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In our modern life, one of the most serious trouble is
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traffic
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a traffic
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jam
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jams
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 in
large
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a large
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 urban
city
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. The main reason
of
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this
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 is that
currently
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,currently
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 everybody
have
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a private
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a private car
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cars
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.
The humans
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Humans
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 prefer to using own
cars
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 on the road.
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, in
big
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the big
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 city
center
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centre
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there are have been
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an increase
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increase
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increasing
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number
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 of
traffic
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jams
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. So it was controlled by
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
governments
.
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 of all, these days
majority
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the majority
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people
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of people
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own
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their own
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cars
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.
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, they prefer to
going
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 work or study
by
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in
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 their own
cars
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. As a
rusult
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result
, there have a lot of
traffic
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jams
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 on the road especially in the evening and morning because
at
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this
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 time, everyone
go
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 to work or study.
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, a
number
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 of roads are more narrow.
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, the capital of Uzbekistan is in Tashkent many individuals
complinte
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complain
 to
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 for narrow streets. A difficult solution to reduce the
traffic
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 jam is to limit the use of private
cars
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instead
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 of public transport. It is
also
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 necessary to increase the price of licenses
,
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 because if
people
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 have fewer private
cars
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, the
number
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 of
traffic
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jams
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 on the roads will
also
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 decrease.
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, in Singapore, licenses are very expensive and many
people
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 have to use public transport.
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, it is necessary to widen the roads and increase the
number
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 of car parks. In conclusion, it can be said that one of the problems that currently
plagues
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 the population is that
people
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 should use
less
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fewer
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 private
cars
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 to reduce
traffic
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jams
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 because it prevents
people
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 from leaving their
cars
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 on the side of the road.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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