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The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #governments #space #programmes #services #schools #hospitals
Authorities spend
huge
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amount
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amounts
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 on space travel
programs
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, on the contrary,
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on the contrary
these
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this
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amount
 of
cost
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costs
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used
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is used
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 on public
places
 as well as schools and hospitals. I completely agree with the aforementioned statement. To commence with,there are several
reason
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 to waste
this
money
firstly
 the
government
 organised
this
 kind of
programs
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program
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 which are extremely expensive,due to
fact
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the fact
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 that in
this
 event
also
 scientist as well as staff
involved
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are involved
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 ,Apart from that
programs
 related
equipment
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also
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is also
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 needed. One of the main
fact
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facts
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that
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is that
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,these
type
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types
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 of
programs
 are not beneficial for ordinary individuals and do not help them. It is only a process which
related
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is related
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 to
waste
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the waste
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 of
huge
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a huge
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amount
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amounts
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 of
money
. Among
this
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these
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,
government
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the government
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 should be prohibited
this
 kind of
programms
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programme
.
On the other hand
,
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the lawmaker
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lawmaker
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lawmakers
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 should
we
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apply
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spend
money
 to rebuild as well as read
building
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buildings
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to
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in
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the
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apply
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public
places
 like schools, temples as well as hospitals. due to
fact
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 that these
places
 are mostly used by every
alternatives
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alternative
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 according to their requirements.
consequently
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,consequently
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government
 should be used a large
amount
 of caused these types of services which are beneficial for people as well as
human
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a human
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being
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beings
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.
For example
, we all use schools, hospitals,
temples
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and temples
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 along with roads
in
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apply
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every day
our
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 life. these
places
 are not in good condition
then
 individual face several
type
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types
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 of problems.
Moreover
, those who do their job for governments
they
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apply
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also
 improve respect in society . it
is continue
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continues
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 like
this
than
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ordinary individuals
also
stands
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stand
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 below in poverty as well as not given a better quality of life. To recapitulate, I believe that
this
 is totally a waste of
money
 and the
government
also
 should be abundant as well as
this
money
 and
used
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use
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for
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it for
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 good purposes for
this
amount
 as well as
development
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the development
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 of public
places
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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