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It is the only responsibility of government to stop the pollution coming from heavy traffic. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#responsibility #government #pollution #traffic
Some individuals opine that only authorities are responsible to control the air pollution caused by traffic
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congestion
. To some extent, I agree
rules
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 and regulations against
pollution creating
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 vehicles
however
, I
also
 believe that people can keep their environment clean by proper driving. In
upcoming
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paragraph
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 I will discuss its agree or disagree To commence with, there are
oodless
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oodles
 of
perspective
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 to glimpse on the viewpoint. Traffic jams can be controlled by making
such
 rules
an
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regulation
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.
In addition
to
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,
government
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the government
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 should
increased
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 the prerequisite of public transportation that can attract people towards public vehicles.
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,
last
 year in India the capital city
New
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 Delhi implemented the rule that cars and bikes should be used only
in
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 working days. As a
further
 matter,
individual
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an individual
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 can
also
 protect their environment by using public transport than their own private cars. To elaborate
it
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, they can
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 not even save
the
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fuel it
also
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keep
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individual
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individuals
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 fit and active.
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, In Japan individuals use bicycles in their daily routine, Even
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their
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 are many product delivery companies which only use
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 for delivering
the
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stuff. Taking
these above mentioned point
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 into consideration from a personal point of view I am inclined to believe that.
It
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 responsibility of both government and individuals to preserve their environment for
long
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 time
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