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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In the modern world, many
companies
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 often emphasize that their
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 contain something new.
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 is because
consumers
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 opt for
products
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 that have some developments.
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 small
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 are unable to produce these
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 constantly, I believe that
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 is a positive situation as it is beneficial to
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 when choosing what to buy. To commence with, cooperations need to unveil new
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 to meet
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's demands.
Consumers
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 are inclined to purchase kinds of stuff that are equipped with new features as they would like to show off purchased
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 to others.
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, many
companies
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 have no choice but are required to advertise something new in their
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 that can appeal to
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. To illustrate, many
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companies
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 put stress on novelty features on their smartphones
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 as cameras or the quality of screens in advertising.
This
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 tendency enables
people
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 to select
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 directly without contemplating. Nowadays, there are various kinds of
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 for each,
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, advertisements that emphasize new points can guide
people
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 to buy cutting-edge ones.
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, it is convenient for
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 to refer to these kinds of advertisements in that
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 can save time.
On the other hand
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, small
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 that cannot generate something new in their
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 because of the shortage of financial resources may be confronted with issues. If
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 cannot appeal
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 in their pieces of stuff,
consumers
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 never buy them even though they are better than other
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' ones.
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, I think that it is still possible for
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companies
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 to sell their
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 without relying on publicities. To conclude, even though
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 trend may be an acceptable situation for small
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 that are unable to develop financially new things, I think that
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 is an excellent situation because
consumers
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 can cut down the time that they spend on shopping.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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