Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefit

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believe that there are many disadvantages that can
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are entertaining and educational. By playing online
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, one can meet people from overseas, they can have opportunities to learn foreign
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those languages. According to
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wikipedia
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them timely.
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them to become more
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to do new tasks, the more they play
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feel that Video
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both mentally and physically. They have
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to win a match, if they fail to defeat the opponent teams they feel frustrated, and could not focus on their study. Some study showed that
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like addiction and
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will bring some common health issues
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earlier of their age, lots of them are suffering from back pain. Some
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are too offensive and use bad
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we used to see bad words from teenagers. In Conclusion, it is true that
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are useful for many
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, while there are many
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that
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mentions
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above
outweight
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outweigh
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offer.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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